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Author Topic: Line by Line Scriptwriting #1 (lead by djr33)  (Read 12430 times)
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« Reply #15 on: May 29, 2005, 01:11:12 AM »

SECRETARY: Yes. Well.... of course. She works here every day... like me. I'm afraid she hasn't been in today, though. A man called her in sick this morning. Why? Is everything alright?
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« Reply #16 on: May 29, 2005, 01:16:28 AM »

MAN: She told me to come in for a visit today. I'm her...Uncle; I'm from Europe, on vacation.
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« Reply #17 on: May 29, 2005, 01:42:18 AM »

SECRETARY: Well... I'm sorry, sir.... but she's not in right now. I can leave a message for her if you'd like.
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« Reply #18 on: May 29, 2005, 01:52:48 AM »

MAN: Err...No thanks.

He quickly walks out

SECRETARY: He's kinda crepy for an uncle...
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« Reply #19 on: May 29, 2005, 01:55:31 AM »

SECRETARY Phone rings, she answers: Hello, Judith speaking. How may I help you.

CUT TO: EXT. OFFICE BUILDING

The man walks out the doors and is in a hurry to get somewhere.
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« Reply #20 on: May 29, 2005, 03:48:07 AM »

Boss steps in front of man.

BOSS: You're late. Again. For the fifth time this month.
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« Reply #21 on: May 29, 2005, 04:26:33 AM »

Man looks uneasy.

MAN: Well... she wasn't there. I think we were right. And why are you being so hard on me... it's only my eigth day on the force.

BOSS: Eh, Just get in the squad car. We've got a lot of work to do. ...and I still don't understand why you insisted on doing this one undercover. No matter. Get in.


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« Reply #22 on: May 29, 2005, 10:27:50 AM »

Big , beffy Gangsters are interrogating a skinny man.

These are gansters not ganstas
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« Reply #23 on: May 29, 2005, 11:36:29 PM »

Steph is brought in by Jim.

STEPH: Josh! No! Stop this!

(note: Josh is now the name of the skinny man.)
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« Reply #24 on: May 30, 2005, 07:05:14 AM »

JIM: Have a seat, young lady.

JIM Forcefully pushes Steph onto a chair.
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« Reply #25 on: May 30, 2005, 12:28:25 PM »

JIM: You know what you did. You know why you're here. If you were a smart little girl you'd do everything we're going to ask you so that you can be out of here with only a flesh wound. But I know you. You won't do that. Bruno, show the broad what we can do.
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« Reply #26 on: May 30, 2005, 04:56:22 PM »

Bruno (the driver from the van) takes out a menacing pair of pliers and reaches for Josh's ears.

CUT TO: (where the police officers from before are now discussing strategy)
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« Reply #27 on: May 30, 2005, 09:57:48 PM »

MAN: Where do you think they could have taken her?

BOSS: First, lets figure out where they didn't take her: They didn't take her to her workplace.

MAN: Isn't that a given?
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« Reply #28 on: May 30, 2005, 11:02:21 PM »

BOSS: Well... is now.

MAN: Any ideas, Boss?

BOSS: Well.. let's figure out what we have to go on. This led us to a dead end.

MAN: Actually, maybe not... on our way over... remember that report of a van hitting a biker? They were obviously in some hurry, witnesses said. I bet that's the van they took her in. She would have been on her way to work this morning....and they just grabbed her there. That would make sense for the Van to have been on Park Blvd...

BOSS: But that still means we have to find the van.

MAN: Yes, but that shouldn't be too hard. I have an idea.

The pair heads back to their black undercover police car. Man uses the radio to talk to the operator.

MAN: Did we get a license plate on that van this morning?

OPERATOR: Hmm... let me see... yes. One of the witnesses was able to write down enough digits for us to find the owner. We sent officers to the home, but she was found dead.

MAN: Have you found the van yet?

OPERATOR: No. Sorry, Sir.

MAN: Does it by chance have a low-jack in it?

OPERATOR: Yes, but we don't have the right paperwork. The owner must--

MAN: I don't think she'd mind. Shes DEAD. Run it.

OPERATOR: That would be against protocol. I--

MAN: Just run it. We'll deal with that later.
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« Reply #29 on: May 31, 2005, 01:08:35 PM »

Wow Daniel, that definatly isn't line by line.  Tongue

OPERATOR: Yes sir

Types heavily on keyboard.

OPERATOR: Found her! She's in the old Nike wearhouse, right next to Pier 1138.
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