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ObiJuan2080

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« on: March 03, 2006, 12:48:27 PM »

Here it is, the second Entry for this workshop is starwalker's film; Attack of the Dollar[/color]

This Entry will be up for 3 days before we post the next one. If a situation arises where we need to keep the Entry up for more or less time, that can be arranged. But as it stands right now, it's 3 days between entries. So enjoy the short film and feel free to discuss it as this was the goal of this workshop.
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« Reply #1 on: March 03, 2006, 04:09:37 PM »

I thought this was a very solid effort for a first real short film.

The idea was creative. The acting, cinematography and editing weren't by any means perfect, but they certainly got the point across. The storytelling should've been clearer, though. It was kinda convoluted.

A little twist at the end... exactly my type of film.

The fx were pretty good as well, considering the time issues.

If I were to pick one thing to advise you to do differently next time, it would be to cut it much quicker.
You could have the movie half the length, twice the pace, and not really loose anything worth keeping.
More than editing it diferently, I mean actually just cutting each shot shorter, etc.

I did enjoy this! Fun short.


EDIT:
Just rewatched--
I noticed the audio again. Really work on this in the future. It takes practice to get the audio to sound good. Also, noise reduction would be a good thing...

Also, add fades to the beginning and end... start/end with black Smiley

Fun music as well Smiley
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« Reply #2 on: March 03, 2006, 06:07:41 PM »

Everyone else will tell you how to make this better.

They're wrong.

All you need is to make more movies with that girl. So cute. Whodat?
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« Reply #3 on: March 03, 2006, 06:17:58 PM »

I second what Fig said.  Wink

 
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« Reply #4 on: March 03, 2006, 06:28:22 PM »

His girlfriend. Name's in the credits.

Actually, along with what fig said.... you should listen to advice, but it won't help you even remotely close to how much it'll help to just keep doing movies... practice, practice practice.
John said this one time... write down the worst thing(s) about your film, and don't ever do them again. That's a great way to make it better, each time, no matter how good the film is.
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« Reply #5 on: March 03, 2006, 06:34:59 PM »

That's your girlfriend? Dude...
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starwalker

« Reply #6 on: March 03, 2006, 10:17:08 PM »

HAHA...fig you made my day, yea thats my girl...haha

Anyway...

Lets see some directors notes and the boring stuff no one wants to here.

-Completely improvised
-Took less than 2 hours to shoot
-Took 5 hours to edit, because I tried to color correct ever shot in AE.
-Last effect looks like crap...I know
-Music by Wproductions
-All normal lighting(Regret that, my first music vid, I added a spotlight, didnt have time for it this time)
-First short ever made by me
-Only third time editing
-Shot with a canon zr60
-Paradoxet.tk...visit it or die
-Last but not least, my girlfriend is beautiful haha...just had to add that

Anyway, Dan

I have ALOT of experience with Audio, as I run a music engineering service. I may go to college for it, hope to be a producer..so I DO plan to incorperate that into my films, just really...I was already 3 hours past the due time, and I was in no way fit to do it, as I was completely tired...on top of that, I need to transfer my Cakewalk studios and adobe audition from my labtop to my home comp.

Not much else to say right now, as no one else gave me any adive, but to use my girlfriend in the next films, and I will If she can bring her acting up a bit, haha(she really hates being infront of the cam, but im trying to change that)

Thanks
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« Reply #7 on: March 03, 2006, 10:36:27 PM »

Stills are good too. I have email, btw.
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starwalker

« Reply #8 on: March 03, 2006, 10:40:53 PM »

HAHAHA..you crack me up dude
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« Reply #9 on: March 03, 2006, 10:41:03 PM »

He wants someting aside from Sue, his blow up doll, to look at.

Anyway... not much to respond to, but sounds like you've got the idea... just keep practicing.
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« Reply #10 on: March 03, 2006, 10:42:29 PM »

Fig just for you...

http://profile.myspace.com/index.cfm?fusea...66C714665509234



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« Reply #11 on: March 03, 2006, 11:14:37 PM »

Ah. Honestly, who doesn't like punk rock chicks.
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starwalker

« Reply #12 on: March 03, 2006, 11:35:03 PM »

OKAy, back on topic, any more thoughts or anything...common...
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djr33

« Reply #13 on: March 03, 2006, 11:43:02 PM »

You asked about color correction. Attached it an image with a few options.
You need more color and more contrast. You also don't want it too dark or too light.

I'm not saying anything in it is that great, but it gives you some ideas of what to play with.
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« Reply #14 on: March 03, 2006, 11:46:49 PM »

Ah nice, see what I did was...brought the footage into AE...messed with the curves and brightness contrast...apparently didnt do it enough, and I never thought about duplicate and overlay or anything, cool...anybody no any good tutorials(besides Ians advanced one?)
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