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Filmmaking => My Boss is an Alien from Outer Space => Topic started by: djr33 on May 26, 2005, 08:08:41 PM



Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on May 26, 2005, 08:08:41 PM
This is the same idea as the script in the games forum, but this script is to remain completely on topic. There will be no random posts, no weird unrelated lines of dialogue. This may actually be used for our film, so please consider that as well... we simply can't do some things... then again, most things are possible.... depending on our creativity.... :D


This is going to be one of a few threads like this. Each should be purposefully different so we have a variety of ideas to work with. Please don't try to make them the same.
Each script thread will be "run" by a member. They have the final call on the script. That's it. What they say goes, so just work around it.

For this thread, I am in charge, Alex C.

Format is simple. Please follow it.

For dialogue, CHARACTER NAMES are in CAPS.
Example:
DANIEL: Hey!

Any action is to be in italics using open and close [ I] , [/ I] commands.
This is an example action.

For action embedded into a line of dialogue, simple place it in parentheses-- ().

Example of all of the above:

John walks in.

JOHN (smiling): So... what's up? (He looks around the room.)


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Alex_C on May 26, 2005, 08:16:35 PM
Place: Forest clearing with long grass and some bushes.
Time: Late afternoon.

DAVE, dressed in dark-coloured clothes, walks stealthily among the bushes, as if he's stalking someone, or something. All of a sudden, he freezes, then slowly, lowers himself down to the ground, so as not to get noticed.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on May 26, 2005, 09:41:59 PM
DAVE (To himself): Hmmm.... right over there. If I could only move in for a closer look...
He leans forward a bit, slowly as to maintain silence.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Yodaman on May 27, 2005, 03:51:22 AM
PEDESTRIAN: What the hell is this freak doing?


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on May 27, 2005, 10:52:22 AM
DAVE: SHHHhhhhhh! Quiet! I'm trying not to scare them. Get down, they'll see you.
Pedestrian, hereby known as Sam, leans down into the bushes and places himself next to Dave.
CUT TO: (what they are looking at)


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Alex_C on May 27, 2005, 01:03:10 PM
SAM: So...what exactly are we looking at? All I see is a pile of rocks and a couple guys walking around them.

DAVE: Wait and see...

One of the men walking around the pile of rocks touches a small rock, and a large boulder moves to the side. The guy looks around, then climbs into the hole that was covered by the boulder. The other dude touches the small rock, and the large boulder slides back to the way it was. He sits down on another rock, and starts looking around.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Yodaman on May 27, 2005, 02:05:51 PM
PEDESTRIAN: This is too freaky for me. I'm outta here.

Dave pulls PEDESTRIAn closer to him.

DAVE: You've seen too much already. No we have to be in this together.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on May 27, 2005, 02:23:39 PM
Sam looks puzzled but obeys. Dave inches forward again.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Yodaman on May 27, 2005, 03:05:51 PM
DAVE: When I say go, we charge for those boulders. Run as fast as you can and try not to make a scene. If you fall behind I will not turn around and help you when they come for you.  


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on May 27, 2005, 03:09:37 PM
SAM: What!?

DAVE: It's worth it.... trust me. You'll believe me once you're inside.

Sam unsure, they begin to move forward.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Alex_C on May 27, 2005, 07:20:32 PM
DAVE: Now, we have to be very quiet, so be sure you don't make too much noise.

SAM steps on a twig, it makes a loud cracking sound.

LOOKOUT GUY hears the noise and turns to where the noise came from.


SAM: Whoops...

DAVE: Go!

SAM and DAVE rush the guard; DAVE gets to him first and karate chops his neck, causing him to pass out.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on May 27, 2005, 08:33:41 PM
SAM: Whoa! That was awesome.

DAVE (shaking his head at Sam, reprimanding): C'mon.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Alex_C on May 29, 2005, 12:27:56 AM
DAVE: Now..which rock was it?

SAM approaches a rock and kicks it. The large boulder slides away, revealing a hole.

SAM: I think it's this one, Mr...

DAVE: Just call me Dave.

SAM: OK, I'm Sam.

SAM and DAVE enter the hole, but they're being watched...

CUT TO: INT. DARK ROOM.

Someone is watching them through a sucky TV.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on May 29, 2005, 12:42:25 AM
GUARD (Watching screen): Security breach. Section 5 alpha 7. Send in first assault teams. This is not a drill. Repeat. Security breach. This is not a drill.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Alex_C on May 29, 2005, 12:46:38 AM
CUT TO: Guards are putting on bullet-proof vests, then rushing out.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on May 29, 2005, 12:54:02 AM
CUT TO: MAIN CONTROL ROOM

SOLDIER: Sir, we have been discovered.

SIR: It is of no importance. Proceed as planned. There is no time.


CUT TO: HALLWAY

Dave looks ready for action and Sam is, very reluctantly, following behind. Dave pulls out a knife.
Meanwhile, a voice is heard. "Security Breach. Section 5 alpha 7"....


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Alex_C on May 29, 2005, 01:13:38 AM
SAM: What a smart move that was. What are you supposed to be anyways?

DAVE peeks cautiosly around a corner, then hides behind it.

DAVE: Keep quiet and do not talk unless i ask you something, and when you answer, whisper. Do you have any martial arts training?


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on May 29, 2005, 01:40:57 AM
SAM: Do I LOOK like a blackbelt to you? What have you dragged me into.

DAVE: Shh....

Dave points around the corner where a group of security guards is posted, on alert.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Alex_C on May 29, 2005, 01:46:42 AM
GUARD 1: Did you guys hear something?

GUARD 2: Yea, but I doubt it could've been anythingn other than more underpaid workers like us patrolling these halls.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on May 29, 2005, 02:01:50 AM
GUARD 3: So, I say we grab a beer at my place tonight. Whaddya say, guys?

DAVE suddenly bursts in, pushes Guard 1 into the wall, rendering him unconcious, throws the knife into Guard 3 accross the room as he reaches for his radio, then kicks Guard 2 as he moves toward him. It is all over quickly.

SAM (Peering in the open doors): Whoa, this is intense.

DAVE: Do something useful, why don't ya. Hold this. He hands him the bag he has been carrying the entire time.

Dave bends down and takes the radio from one of the guards, unconcious (or dead).

DAVE: Let's go!

They head out the door. Sam is still speechless.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Yodaman on May 29, 2005, 03:45:53 AM
DAVE: I can either let you come or let you die. Which do you prefer?

SAM:....... to go with you.

DAVE: Then let's move!

 


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on May 29, 2005, 04:30:08 AM
Dave hands sam a knife. Sam, hands shaking takes it.

DAVE: Times running out. We've gotta go. And fast.

CUT TO: CONTROL ROOM:

Shown on the TV monitor, the pair walks down the hallways.

Leader turns toward his workers and opens his mouth to give his next order.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Yodaman on May 29, 2005, 10:26:05 AM
LEADER: Move the guards to the third level. Surround those insurgents and bring them in alive.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on May 29, 2005, 11:45:33 PM
CUT TO: LONG DARK HALLWAY:

DAVE: Ok, Sam. You'll be fine... just stay close behind me.

They walk down the halls and Sam has calmed down a bit.

DAVE: OK... when we get to the end of the hall, here, I am going to get the guards' attention. I need you to go into the room on the other side of the hall and get something for me.

SAM: What?


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Alex_C on May 30, 2005, 07:02:13 AM
DAVE: What do you mean "what?" You dragged yourself into this, now make yourself useful!

SAM: What do I have to get?

DAVE: It's an object of high importance. It's big, and yellowish orange. You'll see it right away. Ready?

SAM nods.

DAVE whistles

GUARD: Wha? Who's there?

DAVE: Go!


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Yodaman on May 30, 2005, 12:30:00 PM
SAM runs as fast as he can but she eventually trips on a power cord.

DAVE: That stupid little...

Guards come in with guns blazing.


edit: Sam's a guy. she=he. /djr33. (Alex, let me know if you want to leave it... there's no real reason for that not to work, I suppose... but I think we've said he before this.)


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on May 30, 2005, 04:54:16 PM
Dave throws his knife and the guard falls.

DAVE: C'mon! We haven't got all day!

SAM: I...Can't seem to find it. What do you mean exactly?

DAVE: It's in there. Look harder!

SAM: Umm.... still can't find it.

DAVE: I can't hold them off forever!

SAM: Ah, yes. Here it is.

DAVE: Let's go!

As pair yells back and forth, Dave has grabbed the guard's gun and is firing into a long hallway at approaching guards. Sam is in a room off to the side. They are yelling over the gunfire.

When Sam finally runs out with the object, the pair runs back the way they came and then around another corner.


DAVE (Pulling out two transmitters, one of which is the one from the first guard he encountered): [into the new transmitter] I have it. Repeat: I have it. Send in backup teams. [Into the guard's transmitter] You might as well give up now. I have what I came here for and backup teams are on the way. [silence on the other end] Well, anyway, I'll be there soon so we can discuss this in person.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Alex_C on May 30, 2005, 10:04:29 PM
DAVE and SAM walk to an intersection of hallways, where they are ambushed by 15+ guards. The guards all point their guns at SAM and DAVE.

SAM: What now?

GUARD: Hands up.

DAVE: Considering that we're highly outnumbered, and drawing a firearm would be suicidal, I this we should do what we're told.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on May 30, 2005, 10:45:06 PM
The pair is brought before the Leader.

DAVE: Reinforcements are nearly here. I don't see what you expect to gain by holding us. I won't give you anything.

LEADER: Ah, but what you don't see is that I now have leverage against you. Guards, leave us and prepare to stop the reinforcements. No, you-- wait. Take the little one. Kill him.

DAVE: No, wait. He hasn't--

LEADER: (Turning to Dave) Ah, ready to cooperate? Good. (He cracks his knuckles.) Now, where were we? Ah yes, you were about to call off the reinforcements.

Dave slides a knife out concealed in his sleeve. He cuts the ropes binding his arms and throws the knife, hitting the guard holding Sam.

DAVE: You were saying?

The Leader is dumbfounded.

DAVE: "NOW" it  is time to put an end to your illegal cloning facility. You know as well as I do that the clones are only to be made by official government authorized facilities. And you also know that black market cloning is expressly forbidden. Now, though, without this device (pointing to the "object"), you have no means by which to clone.

The Leader runs off and Dave calls after him.

DAVE: It is of no matter now, anyway as we have the building surrounded. This means no escape for you. (He turns to Sam) Thank you for all of your help, but now I must be off.

Dave runs off through the concealed exit which the Leader left though.



NOTES OF EXPLANATION: All of the guards are clones. This takes place in the future when cloning is commonplace, with the only catch that it is only allowed under strict goverment control. The Leader has stolen a device that allows him to clone. Dave's mission is to retrieve it. The upcoming reinforcements will also be clones, most likely.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Yodaman on May 31, 2005, 01:13:20 PM
EDIT: CUT THIS

SAM: Wait! David!

He tries running after him but trips and falls on top of the control pannel. Stunned guards looks at him.

GUARD: DID YOU PRESS THE BIG RED BUTTON?


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Alex_C on May 31, 2005, 07:51:18 PM
Yodaman, While I admire your creativity and want for including an easter egg in this project, I am sorry to tell you that is not what I had in mind for that part of the movie. Thanks.


Note: This message is exactly as Alex wrote it, I simply made it smaller as to not look like part of the script. /djr33


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Alex_C on May 31, 2005, 08:44:47 PM
SAM leaves the interrogation room and wanders the halls trying to figure a way out.

SAM: Now...How do I get out of here?

SAM is looking in every direction exept in front of him, and bumps into a guard (dressed differently than other he's encountered), that is being followed by a large group of many dressed the same as him.

SAM:Whoa, sorry. Who are you?

GUARD: Agent Dave Thompson contacted the FBI office not too long ago, requesting backup units. Do you know where he is?

SAM points the guard in the right direction.

SAM: Yes, he went that way.

GUARD: Thank you.

The group of guards continue down the hallway.

CUT TO: (Dave following the antagonist)


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on May 31, 2005, 09:04:46 PM
Dave is following the Leader down a long dark hallway. There is light at the end and it seems to be his backup gettaway plan to do something there.

DAVE: So it's come to this... no point in running.

LEADER: Ah, but I know something you don't know.

Leader runs faster and Daves runs as fast as he can to keep up.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Yodaman on June 02, 2005, 02:03:07 PM
LEADER keeps running but finds himself at a dead end.

DAVE: It's over.

LEADER: So you think.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on June 02, 2005, 08:54:19 PM
Leader pushes a hidden button in the wall and a door opens that the leader quickly retreats through. Dave tries to follow, but the door blocks his way.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Alex_C on June 02, 2005, 09:03:42 PM
DAVE tries to break the door down by running into it with his shoulder and kicking it, but to no avail.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on June 02, 2005, 09:13:45 PM
He pulls out his trusty knife and begins to try and pick the lock. He finally succeeds and runs off after the door opens and goes on the lookout for the leader, now nowhere in sight.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Yodaman on June 03, 2005, 12:35:36 PM
DAVE: You know this can't go on forever. The sooner you stop running the less severe my strike will be.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on June 03, 2005, 04:24:50 PM
LEADER (from hiding spot): You're superiors won't let you do anything.

DAVE: I have been ordered to take you in. That means anything.

Dave catches a glimpse of Leader running toward some type of escape vehicle of unknown origins and very cool looking.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: Yodaman on June 04, 2005, 07:39:06 AM
Dave pulls laser gun from his pocket and fires at Leader and the starship. They all miss, and the leader enters the cockpit.


MOD EDIT: I'm not aware of any laser gun that Dave has... and certainly not aware of why he didn't use it before :D Perhaps he grabbed one of the guns from the guards... the one holding Sam, before he went after the Leader. No matter, Leader gets into the cockpit after not being stopped by Dave. Up to alex to make that work, but it will work out somehow.


Title: Line by Line Scriptwriting #2 (lead by Alex C)
Post by: djr33 on June 07, 2005, 10:34:18 PM
===Sorry, yoda, but that line has been revised.

After talking to alex, we came up with an ending.===


Dave throws his KNIFE (as in post above, but not lasergun) and Leader. Leader, being superior to the clone guards dodges and has, by then, entered his gettaway ship.

A guard/clone comes up from the side/behind Dave and shoots him, not fatally, but enough to make him fall.

Almost instantaneously, Sam runs in, screaming (ahahauauauuaghghaaghahhaaaaaaa-style) and shoots the guard down easily with his laser machine gun.

He then turns his gun on Leader's ship which is now flying at great speeeds over their heads. The ships is immediately blown to bits by the hundreds of laser blasts.

Sam turns to Dave.


DAVE (with Sam helping him to his feet): Now that you have become one of us, you must remain one of us. You are one of the proud, one of the few... one of us.

SAM: But I...

Dave puts his hand, painfully, on Sam's shoulder. He explains (inaudibly to the camera) about Sam's new life. During this, some of the good clones/reinforcements can be seen doing various tasks, a couple running over to help Dave. Zoom out, cut to farther, zoom out, cut to even further, zoom out.

ROLL CREDITS.